I reviewed Deborah Ortega's and Oscar Acosta's drafts.
The following aspects of my paper will change:
- Length- I should keep my public argument short since it is a blog post but I think it will increase a bit to accommodate some global revisions I have in mind. Mostly addition of quotes.
- Format - I think the format is well thought out and very similar to other activist blogs I have researched.
- Appearance - I should add one more picture that will inspire or encourage action.
- Use of Evidence- I should find at least one more quote to include and review my paper for information that should be cited properly.
- Introduction and Conclusion - I think I will have a lot of work to do with the intro to make sure that the reader becomes engaged and understands where I am leading the argument.
- Structure of your argument - I believe that the structure is looking good and just needs more in sentence citations to increase credibility.
- Depth of your argument - I think the depth of my argument can be improved. Mostly by making sure that I empower the reader with more than just a like but a will and motivation to act.
your responses are very well thought out and detailed, great job. I always think my intro needs more work, I have always thought that's it's the hardest part to write.
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